Happiness This Way

What is your opinion on my poem?

I'm writing a prepositional poem for school. this is madness. within the common people, in my strange mind, beyond the social norm, in the midst of unhealthy thoughts, with devastating changes, below the outwardly fragile beyond the mere expression alone strong, until my endless happiness, as a reminder repeated, oxygen beyond drowned when midnight, for the sake of sleepless nights, in relation to our fragile state, below the murky depths, contrary to the mental differences between the adrenaline abandoned, as a forlorn hope, the closed cages, including once dead, despite the melancholy dreams, along secret knowledge, through the narrow streets dark, with no destination decided, until the end mundane. Do you like or hate?

I think it's very good. Maybe a different style then I'm used to, but representing for me the many layers that must pass before a person can understand. Also one thing you have in your favor, your poem is different is not the same as all other poems. Your teacher will like it, by the time you reach your poem will probably be filled to the top of adolescents who described their most grotesque love life and the misfortunes of it. She is glad of an idea of something different. Good luck = D

Charles Bryant: Vision – a poem